Today’s poem is a rewrite of a piece original called “Living On a Knife Edge”. This poem was one of two, that I submitted to be published, but the other poem was accepted ahead of this piece, and so readers I’m posting this rewritten poem for you to peruse today…..
Living On a Wooden Bridge
Fire, fire, there’s raging fires
I need help to stamp out the flames
Burning down this old timber bridge
A traveler’s last causeway to the edge
Carrying today’s harsh realities
Spanning a lifetime dreams and fantasies
Rain, rain, there’s a Noah’s flood
I need help to stop the cascading suds
Fill the sandbags with riverbed mud
Smother the leakages with woolly rugs
Ring out the qualms and doubts
And refuse doctor’s drugs and handouts
Warning, warning, outside there’s a heatwave
I need help to see through the dusty haze
Douse the fiery furnace tonight
Close the doors, the fireflies are alight
Open your eyes, and view the glowing sights
And cross the bridge into life’s future delights
Ivor Steven (c) March 2020

there’s an urgency to your words here Ivor, asking us to hurry across that bridge, moments between events that are life changing. each stanza represents a timeline of sorts to me or rather acts in a play, rain, fire and dust, earth elements put to the test. thank you for sharing these words.
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Good one, Ivor!
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Thank you V.J., … actually I thought this is the one that would be accepted…. but what do I know……xx
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Hard to be objective, I find.
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Yes…. I always pick the wrong one…… I often wish I had a poet friend close to me for some advice….
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The repeated words and commands in this poem bring to mind a feeling of desperation almost as if one is at the edge of the bridge deciding whether to jump or not. Appropriate, I think, for all the calamities happening. Great write!!
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Thanks Irma, yes, my repeat words are
pleads/commands for help, and over the years, I’ve been blessed with good family and friends to assist me, … yes I’ve been on the edges of those bridges, rivers, fiery furnaces, many a time…. but here I am !!
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So glad you are here and sharing your wise words with us! ❤️
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Family & friends all help me along the way….xx
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Heart-touching poem, Ivor.
Life is filled with challenges. We must not let them defeat us. And, yes, we often need help to get through. I’ve had to learn how to ask for help.
Please keep crossing each “bridge” you come to, Ivor. You are an encouragement to me to do the same. When a new challenge that lands in my path, I think of friends like you and I gather up the courage to keep moving forward. Thank you for being that kind of friend in my life.
(((HUGS)))
PS…Jennifer and Mr. Cohen sound so beautiful together!
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Firstly, Jennifer and Leonard’s touches me every time I listen and read the Lyrics… yes It’s song of courage under difficulties…..
Second, your words of encouragement touch me deeply, and like you, I’ve learnt to ask for help…. and I’ve been fortunate to have had a beautiful supportive family and some wonderful friends….. (Teary…) (((Hugs))) 💙🌏
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Most apt metapors.
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Thank you Derrick
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You are predicting the future which was before the bush fires, which are now and followed by the rain and be prepared for the heatwave to come. Burning all burdens of life gone by the flames of passion surely smoldered as the rains deluge soothes the inner pain washing the heartache from life. The heatwave brings a new start in life with the memories glow shining through. Joan of Arc she was very brave and she battled on with love and passion in her heart as so did your good wife.
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Thank you dear Nanette, and you’ve a-judged the essence of poem superbly…… and I did write the original poem before the bushfires, but I didn’t mean it to be a prediction…. more of a statement about how life travels through cycles in Australia……. and of Course Leonard Cohen’s song and powerful lyrics were well suited to my poem…..💛💙🌏
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Wow Ivor, this is intense, and so moving.
And my gosh, thank you for sharing that song. And the video, so beautifully put together.
This is a gorgeous post!
❤
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Thanks Vanessa, and sitting at my desk wondering if I’ll resubmitted it somewhere else… I thought it was a worthy piece…. and of course Leonard Cohen’s lyrics for ‘Joan of Arc’ are outstanding… 💙💙🌏
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I say go for it!
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Yeah… your little shove might do the trick….
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✋🤚❤😁
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The historical feel entwined with the current emotions, and the feel of urgency….all ties in beautifully Ivor.
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Thanks Colleen, yes a journeyman’s poem, the bridges are there to be crossed…….
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Raw emotions of recent history and emails rapidly flying between myself and my best mate who was one of the guys fighting the fires – I hope you don’t mind I have sent him a link as I know he’ll appreciate your words here.
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I don’t mind at all Jez…I’m honoured…… and yes its a typical Australian story… fire, floods, and heat, but we’re still positive after all of that….!!
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you are brave with the ability to seek help as needed … you plea for conditions, life and ….
Love the song!
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Thank you Kate,,… yes. We need help to recover from, fire, floods, & hot summer’s, and I was a fortunate man to have a wonderful family & good friends
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we get back what we give out Ivor 🙂
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There is tension throughout this piece. You gripped us from the very opening lines.
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Another one in spam Drew …hopefully by answering here now you’ll no longer be sent to spam…. 😀😉
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Well done. I like the repeated request for help through out this poem. Keep on writing my friend.
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My requests for help were always answer by family and friends, I’ve been blessed ….
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Blessed twice. Once for knowing how to ask for help and secondly to have your requests met with love.
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Wonderful, Ivor.
I wonder if any of us are satisfied with a first piece of writing, whether that be poetry, fact or fiction? I know I never am.
Apart from the odd one off, I write weeks in advance of publication, but I go back and edit umpteen times and sometimes even after I’ve published, I’m never satisfied, constantly looking for ways to improve. 🙂
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It was about time I caught up with your beautiful words😍sipping coffee and reading Ivor….no better start of my Saturday .💗
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Yes it’s breakfast time over there…. Most of mine are relatively short …. maybe you’ll need another coffee …💙🌏
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So much beauty thru’ it all. I’d like for you to be captain of any boat at storm. Positive! Yayy!
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Thank you…. Yes there’s beauty in every stormy voyage….xx
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