The Voice (a Monologue), Revised

Today I attended the monthly meeting of Geelong’s, Dome Poetry Group, our assignment was to present a ‘Monologue’ and I duly recited my poem “The Voice”. After taking note of the constructive discussion and a few helpful hints, this afternoon I have written a “Revised Version” of the poem. Special thanks to Guenter (Geelong Writers Pres) and my fellow “Dome Poets”. 
Please note, the original version is attached below





The Voice (a Monologue), Revised


Do not yet shut the doors

But give me leave to speak with you and yours

Do not yet turn away

The time I ask of you is brief for what I have to say

Join me in the shade of this country’s trees

My ancient words are free

But why listen to a language you cannot see

In the past, you have not heard my pleas

And forever! I have been treated harshly


I am a dream-time spirit bird

Flying within your boundaries seems absurd

You! Have clipped my wings

And unashamedly ripped apart my kin

You! Desecrated my sacred ground

For the price of two axes and a Pound

Yes! It’s time to sit without descent

On the sand inside your tribal tent







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G'day, and welcome to my blog site. My name is Ivor Steven, I live in Geelong, Australia. I'm an ex-industrial chemist, and a retired plumber, and a former Carer of my wife(Carole), for 30 years, who suffered from severe MS. I Write poetry about those personal thoughts, throughout and beyond my life as a Carer. I've been blogging for over 2 years, and writing poems for 19 years. Of course a lot of my poems are about my favourite subject Carole, but since I've been blogging my writings have become quite varied, humourous, mystical, observational, and even a few monster/horror poems.

15 thoughts on “The Voice (a Monologue), Revised”

  2. A good revision! I’m so glad you chose this poem to share, Ivor! 🙂
    The Voice is powerful and important! We MUST speak for those who can’t speak (or FEEL like they can’t speak), speak for those who feel like their voices are never heard. You do this so beautifully, Ivor! Thank you! 🙂
    (((HUGS))) for you! PATS and RUBS for Sir Frankie!! ❤️❤️
    PS….“We must always take sides. Neutrality helps the oppressor, never the victim. Silence encourages the tormentor, never the tormented. The opposite of love is not hate, it’s indifference.” – Elie Wiesel

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