Nancy’s, Lai “Singed” challenged me to try the form myself. I’d never written a Lai before, but her poem inspired this first attempt — a small reply shaped from her spark.
Nancy: Singed – The Elephant’s Trunk


A traditional lai is a short French poetic form built on a pattern of nine lines, arranged in three stanzas. Each stanza follows this structure:
- Lines 1–2: 5 syllables, same end rhyme
- Line 3: 2 syllables, repeated refrain
- Lines 4–5: 5 syllables, same end rhyme
- Line 6: 2 syllables, repeated refrain
- Lines 7–8: 5 syllables, same end rhyme
- Line 9: 2 syllables, repeated refrain
The rhyme scheme is: a a b / a a b / a a b
The refrain (“truth hurts”) repeats at the end of each stanza, giving the lai its heartbeat.

And for Sadje’s WDYS >> What do you see # 347- 29 June, 2026 – Keep it alive
Truth Hurts (a lai poem)
I’m an awkward dill
with a broken quill —
truth hurts.
I don’t swallow krill,
nor kill for the thrill —
truth hurts.
I can’t light the grill,
my flame has no will —
truth hurts.
From fog to fire – a quiet truth above, a wild awakening below
Ivor Steven © June 2026

Wonderful lai, my dear friend. Thank you for the very kind nod. 🥰
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And thank you for inspiring me to write a “Lau” 🥰📖
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Interesting form. Well done.
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Thank you so much, VJ 📖🥰
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Nice word play, cleverly done!
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Thank you for kind words
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Brilliant is poem Ivor and thanks for the Glastonbury track fabulous lyrics a reminder of how very talented and special this band are 🩷
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Thank you for your lovely words, 🥰🎶 Ange
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You are welcome 💜
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good ones!
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